Dark Marmosett
11-08-2004, 06:47 PM
It is the Space Century 0001. The year after the U.C. 0399 came to an end. Humans travel to other planets in the solar system and lands on the planets and makes colonies on them. It is a glorious day when human made first step on Mars and terraformed Venus to make it habitable as well as landing on a few moons of Jupiter and Saturn and creating colonies there.
S.C. March 6th, 0004.
Four years ago a pilot named Commander Andor Chaszar of the 1st Strike Force of the Earth Space Defense was battling for the Earth Forces in the mobile suit SGM-398 or more known as a Space GM in that time. It was equipped with: 1x Beam rifle, 2x Head Mounted Vulcan Cannons, 2x Beam Sabers, 1x Shield, and 4x Hand Grenades. He was an ACE Pilot but some believed that he was a newtype, which is a person psychically and telepathically aware with his/her surroundings and can see and sense things from a far distance away. But newtypes haven’t been around for a few hundred years. He fought that battle and took very little damage but what was thought to be another newtype pilot form the Mars Colonies destroyed his mobile suit and he was found unconscious by his fellow teammates and was taken back to the nearest allied ship they could find. He was put under critical condition and didn’t come out of coma for the next four years.
S.C. June 15th, 0008
He awoke in a bed in a hospital on earth and realized that he had no idea who he was or where he was at all. Then he had flashbacks from the war and he then jumped out of the bed and fell onto the floor and started to writhe on the floor and the nurses came rushing in. They were shocked that he awoke from coma and got him back into the bed and got him stabilized. After he was released from the hospital a few months later he was given his dog tag from his army days but it was all melted and deformed so you couldn’t see the name on it and he decided to use a name he thought sounded familiar for some unknown reason to him which was his old name since he doesn’t know where he came from or what his name was he joined the military again...But this time not for his people…not for his race…not for his planet…not for anyone’s planet...but for himself. To become a fighter who’s in search of the lost purity of his past.
S.C. September 23rd, 0008
He joined the military once again and he found himself on the testing fields of Earth for gravity testing on a new mobile suit. This time what he was testing is just not any mobile suit but a new mobile suit labeled as GUNDAM. It was the MSG-001/NOVA, OMEGA, VALIANT, GAIA, TERRA, UNIVERSAL, JUPITER, MARS, SIDE, MEGA, NEPTUNE, PLUTO, VENUS, MERCURY, DELTA, ALPHA, BETA, THETA, PSY, COMET, METEOR, and just GUNDAM that came into being a few years ago at the beginning of the Space Century in the S.C. 0001. It was created to be used as a high performance mobile weapon that could take a lot of hits but deal out even more than it receives. It stood at the approximate of 18.5 Meters and weighed in at a total weight of 40.5 Metric Tons. The armor is made from Super Gundamium Alloy. It was equipped with a few pieces of beam weaponry such as 4x 2.35 MW Beam Sabers, 1x 17.8 MW Beam Rifle, and 10x 4.2 MW Funnel Bits. It is also equipped with 4x 60mm Head Mounted Vulcan Cannons and 2x Small Missile Pods. But sooner or later he would find himself not just a test pilot but a full fledge fighter that will push himself and the GUNDAM to their limits and beyond.
S.C. October 8th, 0008
Tragedy strikes when the Mars Forces found out about the new GUNDAM and sends in mobile suits and destroys all the training and defense mobile suits and all the hangers and buildings. Andor was the only survivor of the attack and escaped with the GUNDAM. He traveled by mountains and forests trying to stay as far away from any civilization to try and not get anyone harmed to get to the closest Earth Forces Base, which was over 1000 KM away.
S.C. October 30th, 0008
Andor finally reached the closest Earth Forces base and he was told to unarm his GUNDAM by the Earth Forces and to get out of the GUNDAM. He was taken to the main HQ building of the base and reported to the head leading military official and told him about what had happened. He told them that he traveled days and many, many miles to get here and encountered multiple enemy mobile suits along the way but destroyed them along the way to leave no witnesses to give information about the GUNDAM and how he stayed away from cities and towns to not get people to react in a negative way to the GUNDAM. The leading official said that he would have to travel to the Earth Forces Main HQ to get orders since the official had no authorization clearance to give orders for a top secret weapon. But he could order the GUNDAM to travel with a ship that would be traveling to the EFMHQ.
S.C. November 1st, 0008
The GUNDAM was loaded onto the ship The Shadow, a Pegasus Class Battleship. Andor reported to the main bridge and talked with the Captain and he said that if there were any attacks by the Mars Forces that he and the GUNDAM would have to help out the Attack and Defense Mobile Suits of the ship. Andor agreed and went down to the Mobile Suit Hanger and got into the GUNDAM to work on the GUNDAM’s system. A few hours later was supper and he went to the Mess Hall to eat. Andor realized that people were staring and whispering probably about him since he was new or because he is the pilot of the GUNDAM. Some people came over and sat down with Andor and started to eat and then one asked a question. Andor gave a look to them and paid no attention to them after that. They tried talking again and Andor gave them the hint that he was exhausted and didn’t feel like talking to anyone at the moment by giving a glance with frowned eyebrows. They backed off and continued to eat. Andor finished eating and left the Mess Hall and wandered the halls to find his room. He spent a good amount of a quarter of a half an hour and finally found it. His name was on the door and it had two other names on it; but he realized that they must have put him in the wrong room because the names were both women. He thought for a second and knocked on the door first and waited for a response. The door opened and a pretty woman with brown hair came out. She asked him what he wanted and Andor told her that he was somehow placed in this room and that he was their new roommate. She stared down Andor for a few seconds and looked as if she was going to snap at him if he said anything. Then a few seconds later, she looked as if she was never ready to snap at him. She politely asked him to come in and make himself comfortable. He asked her which bed was his. She pointed to the bottom one on the right. He set his bag down next to the bed and laid down onto the bed. He laid there for about a hour thinking why was all of this stuff happening to him instead of someone else and he drifted off into sleep and awoke a hour or two later overhearing two voices. But he did not open his eyes. He listened to the conversation of the brunette with the other woman and they were talking about random stuff that guys usually wouldn’t understand and then one of the random topics was about him. But by then he fell asleep again.
S.C. November 2nd, 0008
He awoke in the morning after the alarm went off for all personnel to wake up and get ready. The women were still asleep even after the alarm went off so he quickly cleaned and changed and went off to the Mess Hall for breakfast. As Andor expected, people were staring and whispering as soon as he walked in. Andor got his food and sat down to eat. The women from his room came in the Mess Hall late and they decided to eat with Andor since they were all roommates. People the went into a fury of whispering after seeing them sit down next to him. They asked him if he had a good nights sleep and he said that he guess he did. The peoples whispering started to slow down and came to a stop after awhile. The people started to talk about normal stuff again and some people left and some arrived as if he was a normal person. That’s the way he wanted it. He finished his meal and his name was called over the loud speaker for him to come to the bridge. He went to the bridge and the Captain wanted to talk to him. The Captain said that since they were traveling by sunset yesterday they were bound to be a attack by the Mars Forces since its day light. He told Andor that he should always be battle ready and should be on standby near the Mobile Suit Hanger to get there faster. He also asked the Captain about why he was put into a room as a roommate with two women. He pondered to think about for a while and then he answered, He had absolutely no idea why, probably just a coincidence. Andor almost fell over from hearing that and the Captain said he was dismissed. Andor went to the MSH and got into the GUNDAM. He viewed the battle data that the GUNDAM collected on the enemy mobile suits. He fought 9x NMS-003/ Zaku IV, which is a brought back version of the Zaku II, 5x NMMS-015/Hydra which is a brought back version of the Agguy, and 3x NVMS-023/Gelgogg which is a combination of putting together a gelgoog and a gogg. He wondered how many more kinds of new mobile suits have been made since he was in a coma for four years. He spent the next several hours in the GUNDAM fixing and upgrading. Then a alarm went off. The Captains voice came onto the loud speaker and he said that the sensors have picked up heat signals of what would have seemed to be a mobile suit. He told all mobile suit pilots to get into their mobile suits and launch. The mobile suits of the ship were mostly GGM-002/Ground GM, which were new mass produced ground battleing mobile suits. Andor watched as all the pilots got in their GMs and launched. After that he was given the clearance to launch and go into battle. Some of the GMs gathered next to Andor and the GUNDAM and Andor told half of the GMs to stay at the ship incase they decide to attack the ship and that they should report to him if anything now matter how small. The other half came with him and they went deeper into the forest of overgrown trees. Andor thought what seemed to be an hour passed by before they came upon any enemies. Once they found the enemies they took them by surprise but they had a surprise of their own. A battle hardened veteran. Andor told the GMs to attack and keep the Zaku IVs off of him while he takes on the leader. Since the beam rifle wasn’t operational since it broke while traveling to the EFB. He had to use his Vulcan Cannons and his Beam Sabers to fight, which meant close to medium combat. He finally destroyed the veteran’s gun forcing him into close combat. They squared off with beam saber to beam axe. Flash after flash of hitting the beam axe the veteran pulled out a second one but before he could barely turn it on Andor had a second beam saber out and slashed off the mobile suits hand. The veteran didn’t know what hit him until he realized that his mobile suits left hand was missing and in it a inactivated beam axe. The other men from the veteran’s squad thought they saw the hand get cut off but they weren’t sure until they saw it one the ground. They were frightened from the speed of Andor and the GUNDAM pulling out a beam saber and performing such a feat in that amount of time. They started to retreat and during then the veteran was retreating as well. But Andor pursued and boosted towards him with a beam saber in one hand slashed the mobile suit and the top half of it fell to the ground and the mobile suit exploded. After the smoke cleared all that was visible was some fire on the severed mobile suit. The GMs came over to Andor and over the radio he could hear them talking about what he had just done and how it was amazing it was. Andor said enough chit chatting gossip; lets return to the ship. That day Andor made new friends with the mobile suit pilots of The Shadow and gained respect with that as well. After they got back to base they got into a frenzy of after battle congratulations and they went off to celebrate somewhere. Probably the Mess Hall and they will tell the feats of what happened. So Andor decided it was not a good idea to go to the Mess Hall for supper; so he just went off to his room for the rest of the night.
So what do you people think of it...on a scale of 1-10...how good do you think it was? Be serious because I need to know if I can improve it at all.
S.C. March 6th, 0004.
Four years ago a pilot named Commander Andor Chaszar of the 1st Strike Force of the Earth Space Defense was battling for the Earth Forces in the mobile suit SGM-398 or more known as a Space GM in that time. It was equipped with: 1x Beam rifle, 2x Head Mounted Vulcan Cannons, 2x Beam Sabers, 1x Shield, and 4x Hand Grenades. He was an ACE Pilot but some believed that he was a newtype, which is a person psychically and telepathically aware with his/her surroundings and can see and sense things from a far distance away. But newtypes haven’t been around for a few hundred years. He fought that battle and took very little damage but what was thought to be another newtype pilot form the Mars Colonies destroyed his mobile suit and he was found unconscious by his fellow teammates and was taken back to the nearest allied ship they could find. He was put under critical condition and didn’t come out of coma for the next four years.
S.C. June 15th, 0008
He awoke in a bed in a hospital on earth and realized that he had no idea who he was or where he was at all. Then he had flashbacks from the war and he then jumped out of the bed and fell onto the floor and started to writhe on the floor and the nurses came rushing in. They were shocked that he awoke from coma and got him back into the bed and got him stabilized. After he was released from the hospital a few months later he was given his dog tag from his army days but it was all melted and deformed so you couldn’t see the name on it and he decided to use a name he thought sounded familiar for some unknown reason to him which was his old name since he doesn’t know where he came from or what his name was he joined the military again...But this time not for his people…not for his race…not for his planet…not for anyone’s planet...but for himself. To become a fighter who’s in search of the lost purity of his past.
S.C. September 23rd, 0008
He joined the military once again and he found himself on the testing fields of Earth for gravity testing on a new mobile suit. This time what he was testing is just not any mobile suit but a new mobile suit labeled as GUNDAM. It was the MSG-001/NOVA, OMEGA, VALIANT, GAIA, TERRA, UNIVERSAL, JUPITER, MARS, SIDE, MEGA, NEPTUNE, PLUTO, VENUS, MERCURY, DELTA, ALPHA, BETA, THETA, PSY, COMET, METEOR, and just GUNDAM that came into being a few years ago at the beginning of the Space Century in the S.C. 0001. It was created to be used as a high performance mobile weapon that could take a lot of hits but deal out even more than it receives. It stood at the approximate of 18.5 Meters and weighed in at a total weight of 40.5 Metric Tons. The armor is made from Super Gundamium Alloy. It was equipped with a few pieces of beam weaponry such as 4x 2.35 MW Beam Sabers, 1x 17.8 MW Beam Rifle, and 10x 4.2 MW Funnel Bits. It is also equipped with 4x 60mm Head Mounted Vulcan Cannons and 2x Small Missile Pods. But sooner or later he would find himself not just a test pilot but a full fledge fighter that will push himself and the GUNDAM to their limits and beyond.
S.C. October 8th, 0008
Tragedy strikes when the Mars Forces found out about the new GUNDAM and sends in mobile suits and destroys all the training and defense mobile suits and all the hangers and buildings. Andor was the only survivor of the attack and escaped with the GUNDAM. He traveled by mountains and forests trying to stay as far away from any civilization to try and not get anyone harmed to get to the closest Earth Forces Base, which was over 1000 KM away.
S.C. October 30th, 0008
Andor finally reached the closest Earth Forces base and he was told to unarm his GUNDAM by the Earth Forces and to get out of the GUNDAM. He was taken to the main HQ building of the base and reported to the head leading military official and told him about what had happened. He told them that he traveled days and many, many miles to get here and encountered multiple enemy mobile suits along the way but destroyed them along the way to leave no witnesses to give information about the GUNDAM and how he stayed away from cities and towns to not get people to react in a negative way to the GUNDAM. The leading official said that he would have to travel to the Earth Forces Main HQ to get orders since the official had no authorization clearance to give orders for a top secret weapon. But he could order the GUNDAM to travel with a ship that would be traveling to the EFMHQ.
S.C. November 1st, 0008
The GUNDAM was loaded onto the ship The Shadow, a Pegasus Class Battleship. Andor reported to the main bridge and talked with the Captain and he said that if there were any attacks by the Mars Forces that he and the GUNDAM would have to help out the Attack and Defense Mobile Suits of the ship. Andor agreed and went down to the Mobile Suit Hanger and got into the GUNDAM to work on the GUNDAM’s system. A few hours later was supper and he went to the Mess Hall to eat. Andor realized that people were staring and whispering probably about him since he was new or because he is the pilot of the GUNDAM. Some people came over and sat down with Andor and started to eat and then one asked a question. Andor gave a look to them and paid no attention to them after that. They tried talking again and Andor gave them the hint that he was exhausted and didn’t feel like talking to anyone at the moment by giving a glance with frowned eyebrows. They backed off and continued to eat. Andor finished eating and left the Mess Hall and wandered the halls to find his room. He spent a good amount of a quarter of a half an hour and finally found it. His name was on the door and it had two other names on it; but he realized that they must have put him in the wrong room because the names were both women. He thought for a second and knocked on the door first and waited for a response. The door opened and a pretty woman with brown hair came out. She asked him what he wanted and Andor told her that he was somehow placed in this room and that he was their new roommate. She stared down Andor for a few seconds and looked as if she was going to snap at him if he said anything. Then a few seconds later, she looked as if she was never ready to snap at him. She politely asked him to come in and make himself comfortable. He asked her which bed was his. She pointed to the bottom one on the right. He set his bag down next to the bed and laid down onto the bed. He laid there for about a hour thinking why was all of this stuff happening to him instead of someone else and he drifted off into sleep and awoke a hour or two later overhearing two voices. But he did not open his eyes. He listened to the conversation of the brunette with the other woman and they were talking about random stuff that guys usually wouldn’t understand and then one of the random topics was about him. But by then he fell asleep again.
S.C. November 2nd, 0008
He awoke in the morning after the alarm went off for all personnel to wake up and get ready. The women were still asleep even after the alarm went off so he quickly cleaned and changed and went off to the Mess Hall for breakfast. As Andor expected, people were staring and whispering as soon as he walked in. Andor got his food and sat down to eat. The women from his room came in the Mess Hall late and they decided to eat with Andor since they were all roommates. People the went into a fury of whispering after seeing them sit down next to him. They asked him if he had a good nights sleep and he said that he guess he did. The peoples whispering started to slow down and came to a stop after awhile. The people started to talk about normal stuff again and some people left and some arrived as if he was a normal person. That’s the way he wanted it. He finished his meal and his name was called over the loud speaker for him to come to the bridge. He went to the bridge and the Captain wanted to talk to him. The Captain said that since they were traveling by sunset yesterday they were bound to be a attack by the Mars Forces since its day light. He told Andor that he should always be battle ready and should be on standby near the Mobile Suit Hanger to get there faster. He also asked the Captain about why he was put into a room as a roommate with two women. He pondered to think about for a while and then he answered, He had absolutely no idea why, probably just a coincidence. Andor almost fell over from hearing that and the Captain said he was dismissed. Andor went to the MSH and got into the GUNDAM. He viewed the battle data that the GUNDAM collected on the enemy mobile suits. He fought 9x NMS-003/ Zaku IV, which is a brought back version of the Zaku II, 5x NMMS-015/Hydra which is a brought back version of the Agguy, and 3x NVMS-023/Gelgogg which is a combination of putting together a gelgoog and a gogg. He wondered how many more kinds of new mobile suits have been made since he was in a coma for four years. He spent the next several hours in the GUNDAM fixing and upgrading. Then a alarm went off. The Captains voice came onto the loud speaker and he said that the sensors have picked up heat signals of what would have seemed to be a mobile suit. He told all mobile suit pilots to get into their mobile suits and launch. The mobile suits of the ship were mostly GGM-002/Ground GM, which were new mass produced ground battleing mobile suits. Andor watched as all the pilots got in their GMs and launched. After that he was given the clearance to launch and go into battle. Some of the GMs gathered next to Andor and the GUNDAM and Andor told half of the GMs to stay at the ship incase they decide to attack the ship and that they should report to him if anything now matter how small. The other half came with him and they went deeper into the forest of overgrown trees. Andor thought what seemed to be an hour passed by before they came upon any enemies. Once they found the enemies they took them by surprise but they had a surprise of their own. A battle hardened veteran. Andor told the GMs to attack and keep the Zaku IVs off of him while he takes on the leader. Since the beam rifle wasn’t operational since it broke while traveling to the EFB. He had to use his Vulcan Cannons and his Beam Sabers to fight, which meant close to medium combat. He finally destroyed the veteran’s gun forcing him into close combat. They squared off with beam saber to beam axe. Flash after flash of hitting the beam axe the veteran pulled out a second one but before he could barely turn it on Andor had a second beam saber out and slashed off the mobile suits hand. The veteran didn’t know what hit him until he realized that his mobile suits left hand was missing and in it a inactivated beam axe. The other men from the veteran’s squad thought they saw the hand get cut off but they weren’t sure until they saw it one the ground. They were frightened from the speed of Andor and the GUNDAM pulling out a beam saber and performing such a feat in that amount of time. They started to retreat and during then the veteran was retreating as well. But Andor pursued and boosted towards him with a beam saber in one hand slashed the mobile suit and the top half of it fell to the ground and the mobile suit exploded. After the smoke cleared all that was visible was some fire on the severed mobile suit. The GMs came over to Andor and over the radio he could hear them talking about what he had just done and how it was amazing it was. Andor said enough chit chatting gossip; lets return to the ship. That day Andor made new friends with the mobile suit pilots of The Shadow and gained respect with that as well. After they got back to base they got into a frenzy of after battle congratulations and they went off to celebrate somewhere. Probably the Mess Hall and they will tell the feats of what happened. So Andor decided it was not a good idea to go to the Mess Hall for supper; so he just went off to his room for the rest of the night.
So what do you people think of it...on a scale of 1-10...how good do you think it was? Be serious because I need to know if I can improve it at all.